Scholarship Negotiation Request Email

Well, here it is: the final version of the email I sent requesting more scholarship money. From the forums on TLS it looks like they're flat out saying no to a majority of the people that has asked, so I'm not expecting anything. Which is a bummer.

Dear __________,

I was elated to hear of my acceptance to the 2011 entering class at ____________ with a renewable scholarship of $________ per year. I would like to start by thanking you for this great honor!

While the scholarship offer extended to me from _____________ is extremely generous, not to mention helpful in lessening the financial burden attending law school will create, I have received another offer of admission from _________________ for $_________ per year, renewable as long as I remain in good standing. Although ___________'s location in northern California, along with its reputation for a strong commitment to ethics and social justice and beautiful campus, has made it a long-standing dream of mine to attend, I find that a better offer from a higher-ranked school in an area with a lower cost of living is very difficult to logically turn down.

In light of my strong admission profile, profound desire to attend, and scholarship offers from other schools, I am writing to respectfully request your consideration for additional renewable scholarship dollars. If there was any way that the cost of attending ______________ could be lowered, it would certainly become my top choice.

Thank you so much for taking the time to review and consider my request.I look forward to your response with great anticipation. Please feel free to contact me with any questions you may have.

Respectfully,

Twentysomethinglaw

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